CELPIP® Writing Task 2 sample: Condo Ground-Floor Room Survey

Level 7 sample answer

174 words

I think the board should choose Option B and make the room into a health services room.

Many owners in our building are retired, like my parents, who live on the fourth floor. My father has high blood pressure and he needs to check it often. Now he takes two buses to the clinic, and in winter the sidewalks is icy, so sometimes he just stays home. If a nurse came to our building twice a month, he could go downstairs in the elevator.

The flu shots would help everybody too, not only seniors. Last year I wanted to get a flu shot, but the pharmacy near us had a long line and I gave up. In our own building, it would be fast and easy.

I understand that young owners want a gym. Exercise is important for health too. But there is community centre with a gym ten minutes away, and people can also walk outside for free.

For me, Option B is better because it helps the people who really need it.

Why this answer is at level 7

This level 7 answer gives a clear preference and supports it with understandable examples of travel difficulties and missed vaccinations. Its simple vocabulary, occasional grammar errors and limited comparison of the plans keep it below the more developed arguments in the higher-level answers.

• If a nurse came to our building twice a month, he could go downstairs in the elevator. — Content/Coherence: This follows logically from the father's difficult clinic journey and makes the benefit of downstairs care concrete. A higher-level answer would connect easier access more explicitly to regular monitoring and prevention of worsening health problems.
• In our own building, it would be fast and easy. — Vocabulary: The familiar words communicate convenience clearly, but describe the benefit broadly. A higher-level answer would use more precise language to explain how convenient clinics could encourage residents to attend and receive preventive care.
• and in winter the sidewalks is icy, so sometimes he just stays home. — Readability: The cause and effect remain easy to understand, but 'sidewalks is' has a subject–verb agreement error. The higher-level answers maintain grammatical control while explaining similarly detailed travel barriers.
• But there is community centre with a gym ten minutes away — Task Fulfillment: The answer considers an alternative exercise facility, helping explain why the health services room deserves priority. A higher-level response would also weigh the proposed gym's convenient access against the health benefits of visiting clinics.

Level 9 sample answer

185 words

I'd vote for Option A and turn the old rental office into a fitness room.

The biggest advantage is that owners would actually use it every day. Between my job and my two kids, the only time I can exercise is after 9 p.m., when the nearest gym, a fifteen-minute drive away, is about to close. I've paid for memberships before and dropped them within a few months for exactly that reason. A treadmill a few floors below my unit would remove every excuse I have.

It's also the more cost-effective choice. A gym membership in Dartmouth runs about $50 a month, so paying $10 extra in condo fees for unlimited access would save me, and many of my neighbours, a fair amount of money.

I do sympathize with retired residents who find it hard to get to appointments. However, a nurse visiting twice a month would serve a small group for a few hours, while the gym would be open around the clock to everyone, including seniors who want to stay strong and mobile. That's why I believe Option A is the better investment.

Why this answer is at level 9

This level 9 answer develops a persuasive case through scheduling, cost and access, with fluent sentences and a direct response to retired residents' needs. It falls short of the top model because some claims about likely gym use and clinic reach are broader than its supporting examples justify.

• The biggest advantage is that owners would actually use it every day. — Content/Coherence: This establishes a clear argument about frequent use, supported by the writer's scheduling difficulties. However, personal experience does not establish daily use across the building. A higher-level answer would distinguish availability from likely participation and explain the resulting health benefits.
• including seniors who want to stay strong and mobile. — Vocabulary: The phrase 'strong and mobile' identifies relevant health outcomes and directly includes seniors in the gym's benefits. A higher-level answer would develop this precise language into a fuller comparison with the preventive benefits of the nurse's clinics.
• I've paid for memberships before and dropped them within a few months for exactly that reason. — Readability: This sentence connects smoothly to the preceding explanation about work, children and gym closing times. The conversational phrasing reads naturally. The top model adds greater sentence variety while connecting personal examples to wider consequences for residents.
• so paying $10 extra in condo fees for unlimited access would save me, and many of my neighbours, a fair amount of money. — Task Fulfillment: This uses the upkeep fee to make a practical comparison with gym memberships. However, the savings mainly benefit residents who would otherwise pay for a gym. A higher-level answer would connect this financial advantage more directly to better health across the building.
• a nurse visiting twice a month would serve a small group for a few hours — Content/Coherence: This creates a direct comparison with continuous gym access, but treats the clinic's limited reach as established. A higher-level argument would also weigh how valuable each visit could be for residents who struggle to reach essential care.

Level 11 sample answer

180 words

I'd urge the board to set the room up as a health services space, as described in Option B.

Tallis Point has become a building of retirees; by my count, at least a third of the units on my floor belong to owners over seventy. For many of them, a routine blood pressure check means a forty-minute bus ride across the bridge, which is an ordeal once the freezing rain arrives. My neighbour Dmitri, who manages diabetes, told me he skipped two foot care appointments last winter because the trip felt too risky. Were a nurse to come to our ground floor twice a month, problems like his would be caught early instead of being left to worsen.

A fitness room, on the other hand, would mostly serve owners who are already active. Those who most need to move more rarely wander downstairs to a treadmill at midnight.

Admittedly, a 24-hour gym would suit owners with demanding schedules. Yet with $40,000 enough for only one plan, I'd rather it went toward basic care for the residents who need it most.

Why this answer is at level 11

This level 11 answer links a specific resident's missed care to a clear building-wide priority, then weighs that priority against the gym's convenience and the limited setup budget. Precise vocabulary, varied sentence structures and a focused concession make the argument strong.

• My neighbour Dmitri, who manages diabetes, told me he skipped two foot care appointments last winter because the trip felt too risky. — Content/Coherence: The example connects a named health condition, a relevant clinic service and a concrete travel barrier. It gives the following argument about earlier care a clear foundation and makes the consequences of difficult journeys more specific than inconvenience alone.
• which is an ordeal once the freezing rain arrives. — Vocabulary: The word 'ordeal' conveys the burden of the journey economically, while 'freezing rain' makes the seasonal obstacle vivid. These choices strengthen the argument about access without requiring a lengthy explanation.
• Were a nurse to come to our ground floor twice a month — Readability: The controlled conditional inversion adds grammatical variety. Within the complete sentence, it connects the proposed service to earlier detection of problems, allowing the answer to move smoothly from Dmitri's experience to the plan's potential benefit.
• Admittedly, a 24-hour gym would suit owners with demanding schedules. — Content/Coherence: This acknowledges a concrete strength of the competing plan. The concession prepares the final judgment: convenient exercise has value, but the writer gives greater weight to access to basic care for residents facing difficult journeys.
• Yet with $40,000 enough for only one plan — Task Fulfillment: The conclusion uses the setup budget to frame the decision as a choice between competing health priorities. This directly supports the preference for basic care and keeps the final recommendation grounded in the board's actual decision.